by Brian Lindenmuth
“Traffick” by Jim Wilsky is from the Shotgun Honey Both Barrels anthology.
This story is broken up into two sections, a shorter first section and a longer second section. The first section didn’t really work for me. There can be a fine line sometimes between phonetic and demotic dialog; the former always sounds off to me and is a pet peeve of mine and the latter is often the hallmark of great dialog. The dialog in the first section falls just on the phonetic side of the line. The second section however puts back on firmer crime fiction territory. Lots of criminals butting heads with one another in the section section.