Put Me In Coach by Kathleen Dopart

by Barb Goffman

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From Crime Scene New Jersey 3 (Clued In Press 2010)

This story is told in the form of a letter. The letter-writer is telling a friend about an incident that occurred the prior year, which resulted in the letter-writer fleeing the country. The story that proceeds from there is like a TV action movie, in which a woman at a bar picks up the wrong purse, which has a gun and drugs in it, and then the bad guys start chasing the woman and her brother.

The telling of this story from a distance – we know at the start that the letter-writer comes out of the situation alive and well and with a sarcastic sense of humor about the whole thing – lessens the tension and impact of the drama. It might have been better to just show the story unfolding as it happened.

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